Month: May 2016

The Revenge

I am still terrified,amazed and confused with what has happened this summer. It is really hard to explain because this experience still scars me today. Even though I forgot some details, I will still try to tell toy my story.

It all started on the 27 July. It was a normal summers day.Brian (my friend) and I were playing football. I was taking the penalties and Brian was in-goal . We weren’t surprised that the park was full of people as families were having their picnics and other kids were just playing about. It was a nice day in the park.

The clock finally hit 4 which meant unfortunately Brian had to go home. Due to the fact that Brian went home, I just went back to my house .I arrived . Home Sweet Home. I’ve always loved my house I thought it was the perfect house. The kitchen was always full of my favourite snacks and my bedroom, well I loved my bedroom. It had my TV; My posters;My console and the most important aspect of a bedroom, my bed. My bed was lovely to sit on and to lay on it wasn’t just my bed it was also my couch.

As I always do on a summer’s day when I’m not travelling , abroad or playing with my friends. I turn on my Xbox and play a variety of my favourite video games. The thing with me is that when I play video games I’m I another world . First I was playing football then I was an assassin , that is why I love video games and so do most of mt friends(Brian included). But I suddenly was interrupted.

My sister comes into my room and warned me ” Tiago I am going to my friend’s house OK, be careful” so then I respond ” OK Bye”She then walks away . Straight after I just went back to my virtual world. Suddenly I take off my headphones which led to me hearing my front door open and close and also a weird extra terrestrial sounding noise, But I make nothing of it and I just go back to playing video games like nothing happened. It was probably that I was already scared to death or I was more interested in the game as I was playing an adventure game.

As I am a curios person sometimes I think too curios. I walk out my bedroom to suddenly see … nothing. I was confused . I made my way through the hallway to my kitchen where I caught a glimpse at a can of Pringle’s. My favourite . As I am a greedy kid sometimes, I take the whole can and run back to my room in laughter.

10 minutes later I hear the same exact noise from before but now coming from my parent’s room(which is right next to mine). So as I said  I am a curios boy. So i got up my bed;go to my door and open It. As I slowly walked towards my parent’s room my heart started beating fast and faster it felt like my heart was going to explode but nothing was there…

Suddenly a mysterious creature jumps on me and starts scratching my face;Chewing my face and ripping my skin off. I kept screaming and screaming I also start to move around and that was when I hit a table with a TV on top which falls on top of the creature. Most of my vision went slightly blurry but I manage to get my phone out of my pocket and call 999 and I say “I need an ambulance now I’m bleeding out”. I try to keep straight and that was when I hear the paramedics come into the house and that was when I completely blacked out.

Its been 6 months but nowadays every single time I look into the mirror I think I am looking straight at the devil, I’ve lost everything my friends the rest of my family but if it wasn’t for my mother, father and sister I would have probably had taken my life already.

THE END

Setting:for my mystery story I will be making my main setting my house I choose this as I know my house really well due to the fact that I have live in this house for about 3 years.

Opening: I will open my story in the park in front of my house and I will be joined by my good friend Brian we will start by playing football but then I will end the opening paragraph with me going back to my house.

Fiction Trigger: I will hear my front door open and close but also something scratch the door I will say it made an extraterrestrial noise but I wont tell them what it is this will make my reader think I am dealing with an alien but in fact my dead dog.

Development: I will start a 2 to 3 paragraph development which will include high amounts of description and I will also try my best to pace my writing as best as possible I will be playing video games and going to the kitchen during in the 3 paragraphs to make it more friendly of an environment.

Climax:I hear something walking up and go into my closet so I get of my chair and slowly walk to the closet and I will add a dramatic feeling. I open the closet and my old dog jumps on me and completely destroys my face in the way I hit my table which has my tv on top, my tv falls and hits the dog in the head this somehow killed him i get the phone and call 999 and ask for an ambulance(put … at end of paragraph)

Conclusion:back to present day and i say ‘nowadays every single time i look into the mirror i think i am looking straight at the devil, ive lost everything my friends the rest of my family but if it wasnt for my mother, father and sister I would have probably had taken my life already.

THE END

The book which I have  read this half term is called ‘Ratburger’ by David Walliams it is about a young girl which looses her mother and her father later on losses his job . This girl own a hamster which one day sadly passed away . This part of the book I can relate to as when I was younger I had a hamster which died and it was quite tough recovering from it ,because the girl is so sad one day she found a cute rat which she took to school as her stepmother would prabably kill it . She didn’t really have any friends but she was friends with the owner of the sweet shop near her school . That is all I am going to tell you because I don’t want to ruin the book for you but in my own opinion this is now one of my favourite books and for that reason I will rate this book a 4.7/5 which is pretty high In my standards. The next book which I am going to read next will probably be another David Walliams book or I might become e a bit more adventurous and find a completely new series of books.